This is a strong piece , i feel that you have managed to create a very informative piece full of statistics and key information to do with this topic . i feel you have chosen the correct style of writing aimed at your target audience as it is very formal . your article is visually captivating due to the image you used as w.i.l.l.i.a.m is a well known artist therefore people are more likely to be attracted to it for that reason. i feel you could improve by proof reading again as there were some mistakes but they are easily fixable also maybe you could have used a sub heading as these allow the audience to further get a feel of the article without reading the whole thing which might be useful . overall i think this is a very good piece of writing and is very informative and shows you have researched your target audience well .
Selina, this is a mainly well written piece and you have followed an appropriate structure, using good journalistic language and tone. Proof read for careless mistakes. The layout and image both work, and you have experimented with techniques such as columns, headers and page numbers. Make sure you removed grid lines on the export, and consider using captions, pull quotes and sub heads to break up large chunks of text. Vanessa
This is a strong piece , i feel that you have managed to create a very informative piece full of statistics and key information to do with this topic . i feel you have chosen the correct style of writing aimed at your target audience as it is very formal . your article is visually captivating due to the image you used as w.i.l.l.i.a.m is a well known artist therefore people are more likely to be attracted to it for that reason. i feel you could improve by proof reading again as there were some mistakes but they are easily fixable also maybe you could have used a sub heading as these allow the audience to further get a feel of the article without reading the whole thing which might be useful . overall i think this is a very good piece of writing and is very informative and shows you have researched your target audience well .
ReplyDeleteSelina, this is a mainly well written piece and you have followed an appropriate structure, using good journalistic language and tone. Proof read for careless mistakes. The layout and image both work, and you have experimented with techniques such as columns, headers and page numbers. Make sure you removed grid lines on the export, and consider using captions, pull quotes and sub heads to break up large chunks of text. Vanessa
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